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    dots Submission Name: Golden Girldots
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    Author: dismal_s child
    ASL Info:    19/F/On A Carousel
    Elite Ratio:    3.24 - 451/419/172
    Words: 145
    Class/Type: Poetry/Friendship
    Total Views: 534
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    Description:
       Just a quick word to an old close friend.


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    dotsGolden Girldots
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    Half-listening to the voice on the phone.
    She complains about love.
    All the time.
    And how unjust,
    And so uptight.

    Her words don't phase me,
    they don't even intrigue me.
    [And I'm a very curious person.]
    I don't care what she has to say.

    I hear the same things.
    Over and Over again.
    Frusterating isn't it?
    How does she entrance so many?
    So shallow. So vain.
    And they say I'm arrogant!?

    I face up to my past.
    But, leave it where it belongs,
    She admires hers,
    Making it her present.
    Always, Always, Always.
    So ever present.

    But, I supose I'm just jealous.
    Or so I've been told.
    Is it possible to be nothing,
    yet to have it all?
    Or is All really nothing,
    and Things all for naught,
    And We can go to our graves,
    in [figurative] emotional gold?!?!




    Submitted on 2009-06-14 01:54:20     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Hmm interesting piece here, i enjoyed it although there was a spelling error (frustrating not frusterating) but this did nothing to impede the poem. A good view on how sometimes we get caught on into boring conversations and do not know how to escape from it,blah blahblah bla. Haha it drives me crazy! Anyways good poem!
    | Posted on 2009-10-29 00:00:00 | by Clayman | [ Reply to This ]


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