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    dots Submission Name: A Dawn Chorusdots

    Author: Frank Maguire
    ASL Info:    57 / UK
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 1846/1390/288
    Words: 241
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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    dotsA Dawn Chorusdots

    With the rising sun each morning
    As the dawn breaks from the night
    A chorus will adorn your ears
    As the birds all take to flight

    An orchestra born on the wing
    With the sweetest melody
    As they sing as one in unison
    And in perfect harmony

    Some swallows and a cockatoo
    Will strum and beat the base
    Conducted by a wise old owl
    With a smile upon his face

    Two parrots and a crested grebe
    And a sleepy nightingale
    Arranging the percussion
    With a crow called Abigail

    Fourteen pink flamingos will
    Pluck hard on every string
    While a little robin redbreast
    Finds a bell and makes it ring

    A condor and an albatross
    With a golden eagle too
    Will glide up in the stratosphere
    And harmonise for you

    A choir made from turtle doves
    Will grace the morning air
    And sing out to the heavens
    With such beauty that is rare

    Two larks will sing soprano
    As a seagull blows the horn
    And a sparrow plays the tambourine
    As the beat goes on and on

    A grand finale will ensue
    As the birds all flock as one
    To take a bow and sing once more
    Beneath the rising sun

    As they disperse and fly away
    Over land and through the glen
    Come tomorrow as the morning breaks
    The dawn chorus will come again

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      lol! This is clever and cute!

    I keep out bird feeders and have a lot of dense shrubbery on my lot, thus have a variety of birds. At first twilight, both Mourning Doves and Mexican White Wing Doves commence to coo and carry on. They are followed by the songs and enthusiastic chorouses of something like a half dozen other species, so the out-of-doors is beginning to sound like a loosely conducted nature choir!

    This was a fun and well structured read!
    | Posted on 2009-06-15 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
      Hehe I love this poem!! I can just imagine all the birds now lining up and performing in the trees in my garden, its a great picture. Thanks for making me smile with this piece. Wonderful as always

    | Posted on 2009-06-14 00:00:00 | by elseibi | [ Reply to This ]

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