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    dots Submission Name: Let Me Choose The Arsondots
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    Author: LadyInRed88
    ASL Info:    19/f/MO
    Elite Ratio:    3.68 - 131/180/32
    Words: 105
    Class/Type: Poetry/Angry
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    Description:
       Contempt, hate, malice, etc... It all comes from being mislead, mistreated, and brokenhearted. Let me know what you think!


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    dotsLet Me Choose The Arsondots
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    Why did I let you control my mouth?
    You handpicked the arson dancing inside my blood...
    Drops of poison entwined in a rage of passion-
    O' will it ever hurt me enough??

    (To satisfy you-
    To satisfy your need...
    Your need to kill me slowly-
    Your need to watch me bleed??)

    Where did you find so many colors,
    In your dirty calloused hands?
    O' you painted me so well, love-
    Streams of crimson in the desert sands...

    Sweet love, you're unworthy of my breath-
    Let me infect you with my pain...
    Let ME choose the arson-
    To go dancing through YOUR veins....




    Submitted on 2004-07-17 10:16:50     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Very nice. I really don't know what to say about this piece. I'm not sure about the line "... desert sands" I like it, but I don't know how it fits. I really don't see anything that needs to change. I enjoyed the read
    | Posted on 2004-07-17 00:00:00 | by nicelyJ | [ Reply to This ]
      ohh, nice nice nice. Its a very clever piece, as the title largely suggest, the first stanza, with lines like: Why did I let you control my mouth?
    You handpicked the arson dancing inside my blood...
    Drops of poison entwined in a rage of passion-
    O' will it ever hurt me enough?? those is just awsome, there seems to be quite a bit of malice flowing throughout this piece, and its kind of erie, (I think thats the lake and not the real spelling) anyway I'm babbling now, so GOOD SHOW.
    | Posted on 2004-07-17 00:00:00 | by Anarius | [ Reply to This ]


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