Description: Contempt, hate, malice, etc... It all comes from being mislead, mistreated, and brokenhearted. Let me know what you think!
Let Me Choose The Arson -------------------------------------------
Why did I let you control my mouth?
You handpicked the arson dancing inside my blood...
Drops of poison entwined in a rage of passion-
O' will it ever hurt me enough??
(To satisfy you-
To satisfy your need...
Your need to kill me slowly-
Your need to watch me bleed??)
Where did you find so many colors,
In your dirty calloused hands?
O' you painted me so well, love-
Streams of crimson in the desert sands...
Sweet love, you're unworthy of my breath-
Let me infect you with my pain...
Let ME choose the arson-
To go dancing through YOUR veins....
Very nice. I really don't know what to say about this piece. I'm not sure about the line "... desert sands" I like it, but I don't know how it fits. I really don't see anything that needs to change. I enjoyed the read
ohh, nice nice nice. Its a very clever piece, as the title largely suggest, the first stanza, with lines like: Why did I let you control my mouth? You handpicked the arson dancing inside my blood... Drops of poison entwined in a rage of passion- O' will it ever hurt me enough?? those is just awsome, there seems to be quite a bit of malice flowing throughout this piece, and its kind of erie, (I think thats the lake and not the real spelling) anyway I'm babbling now, so GOOD SHOW.
Submission Name: Let Me Choose The Arson
