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Author: vampirefreak69
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Words: 188
Class/Type: Poetry /Longing
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How to say this
Something of which seems so simple
Yet so intimidating
How to explain
Something so real
Yet so unbelievable.

What words can I say
To make you understand
What can I do
To prove to you..

That I'm falling.

How do I know
That if you know
My thoughts, my hopes, my dreams,
My everything
That it won't blow up in my face
Just further proving that I'm a disgrace.

How to say this
Something of which has a great hold
Yet can be so easily broken
How to explain
Something so true
Yet so confusing.

What words can I say
To make you understand
What do I do..

When my heart beats for you.

How do I know
That this isn't all just a dream
My feelings, my heart, my love
That by tomorrow
You'll be gone
Just like the rest.

How to say this
Something meaningful
Yet so terrifying
How to explain
Something so new
Yet so amazing.

What words can I say
To sum it all up..

I think I love you.

Submitted on 2009-06-15 01:09:22     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Great work! You have an amazing way with words... which is somewhat ironic as the poem was talking about how you couldn't find the right words(or thought you couldn't) to convey what you felt. Bravo! Keep it up and thank you for sharing.
| Posted on 2009-06-15 00:00:00 | by Dreamer5009 | [ Reply to This ]

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