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    dots Submission Name: Belongingdots
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    Author: elephantasia
    ASL Info:    37/F/UK
    Elite Ratio:    3.54 - 398/490/159
    Words: 258
    Class/Type: Deep Thought/Misc
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    dotsBelongingdots
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    At the dawn of this life
    lost was that sense of belonging.
    Sought and searched for
    Long and hard
    Like a fabled needle in a haystack.
    "Believe in lack, believe in lack"
    Society cried!
    Society lied.

    Round peg, round peg, ROUND PEG!
    And all the holes seem square.
    "I fit where?"

    A soft loud whisper turned head
    and inward I ventured
    Deep into the expanse of my soul
    "Once more and to the roots my friend!"
    Flexible, in I bend.

    I ate a nectarine this morn
    It's flesh is now my flesh.
    It juice, sluices through my veins
    and flushes me out
    in a cycle of life and death and life.
    ...and death
    and life.

    ...and on and on it goes never ending
    and never beginning.

    And this air I breath now
    that yesterday you breathed
    the trees renewed for us.
    Your breath filling up my lungs.
    And mine yours.
    Ha who owns the air we share.
    Does it belong to us
    or we to it?
    Do we belong to each other?

    Where is the root?
    It is in my heart and yours.
    Planted in a soil of velvety nothingness
    It's food, potential.
    It's flowers and fruits,
    brought forth by intention.
    Watered by choice.

    We all come from this Great Goddess' womb
    Here we ALL belong.

    "I fit where?"
    I fit here.

    Therefore I too, as you, must belong everywhere.

    I carry everywhere with me
    in my heart.








    Submitted on 2009-06-15 04:15:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      A very deep write indeed! I especially like the part of "round peg"......all the holes are square, I fit where. Then with the other stanzas you reached within your soul and unleashed your feelings. A great piece!










    | Posted on 2009-06-15 00:00:00 | by msmystic | [ Reply to This ]


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