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    dots Submission Name: Children of the nightdots

    Author: msmystic
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 15/1/5
    Words: 100
    Class/Type: Misc/Serious
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    dotsChildren of the nightdots

    Appearing once the sun set
    children of the night
    begging in the street
    willing to do anything
    for a chance to eat

    Little scrawny bodies
    being pimped about
    sunken eyes staring
    viewing everyone
    scared, no doubt

    These little ones
    the "forbidden fruit"
    over and over
    used and sexually abused
    enduring hurt and pain
    as adults enjoy the
    perverted game

    Sun begin to rise
    another day
    Into the rat infested areas
    where they must lay

    Sleep and dreaming
    awake and pretending
    hoping for
    A ONCE UPON A TIME..........

    Submitted on 2009-06-15 10:37:51     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Wow. I loved this!!! You're amazing!! I think you're right though, people need to stop being so cruel and perverted, because they're just making things worse. Those poor children try as hard as they can to survive, but society pushes them back and make them stay out of their way. Unless of course that was all symbolic of something else and I'm just not seeing it. Please tell me what this was all about! A great read, at any rate, thank you so very much for sharing, this is one of my favorite things that I have read today.
    | Posted on 2009-06-15 00:00:00 | by Dreamer5009 | [ Reply to This ]

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