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    dots Submission Name: I feel like more of a burden than an assetdots
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    Author: EEKS
    Elite Ratio:    2.82 - 647/1087/624
    Words: 182
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Misc
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    dotsI feel like more of a burden than an assetdots
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    I don't feel too good about our car rides
    The music plays so low and my voice is too loud
    And from the top of the world I can look down
    I can see my life from here but nothing is clear

    I am beginning to feel like more of a burden than an asset
    But in a few days I promise I'll be lighter, and baby I know its a strain
    But carry me

    I know we can't spend time together
    I can't wake up next to you
    But this is not our forever
    Its just a break between us two

    I am beginning to feel like more of a burden than an asset
    But in a few days I promise I'll be lighter, and baby I know its a strain
    But carry me

    I love you even though neither of us is smiling and no one would call this a good time
    I'll kiss you even when you're crying
    But you don't need to cry for much longer
    Carry me
    Carry me
    Just a little longer




    Submitted on 2009-06-15 18:16:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      remeber in a relationship,your partner should always be there.
    i liked it.it reminded me of my past.so good job!
    rachel:)
    | Posted on 2009-06-15 00:00:00 | by PopRocksRae | [ Reply to This ]


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