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    dots Submission Name: the new medots
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    Author: PopRocksRae
    ASL Info:    21/ F/ Heaven
    Elite Ratio:    2.49 - 232/369/355
    Words: 144
    Class/Type: Poetry/BrokenHeart
    Total Views: 684
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 926



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       i can't be sorry.i can't feel anything any more!


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    dotsthe new medots
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    you have guts.
    i'll give you your guts back!
    you didn't "mean it"
    how did you think i would re-act?

    that i would be like the old me
    just roll over and wait?
    hey honey,im tough
    and i got all i could take!

    did you think im sorry?
    well im not anymore.
    you had to fight me.
    im somethig you couldn't afford.

    you said" you loved me."
    i fell for that again.
    my heart is done being broken.
    im done giving in.

    what is sad.
    is i was all yours for life
    i thought i would put down my walls.
    but you rather talk to me with strife.

    i hate my feelings.
    but i hate you more than that
    i tried to stay with you.
    but you can't take it back!











    Submitted on 2009-06-15 20:11:53     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Wow, again, stunning. You have a great command of emotions and how to get your audience to feel what you feel. I even got angry/pissed after reading that. Keep up the amazing work!!!! I think that if you were to try to get your poems published, you would become one of the greatest known poets of all time. Seriously! I love all that you write. Again, Bravo!

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    | Posted on 2009-06-15 00:00:00 | by Dreamer5009 | [ Reply to This ]


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