I don't agree with "Carrie" on making your work longer. Sometimes getting your point across in a long drawn out poem can get lost and your work is completely misjudged. You don't want to lose your readers, you want to keep them on the edge. I like your style kiddo...short, bitter-sweet, and to the goddamn point! I have to pass up so many poems because they are too long and have too many topics in them to critique on. So rarely do I even get a chance to critique because I get too disgusted with nothing but ramblings with no thought or work put into it. You pick and chose your words carefully and place them in an order you see fit. Now that is art in word form.