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    dots Submission Name: What it wasdots
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    Author: Dreamer5009
    ASL Info:    16, Male, USA
    Elite Ratio:    5.02 - 73/53/28
    Words: 79
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 786
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    dotsWhat it wasdots
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    The world started fresh
    different from the rest
    the sights, sounds, smells all mesh
    the completion of the test

    there was one thing there, though
    something that held it together
    never old, to grow
    but to remain, forever

    this thing, so bright
    so intense and unique
    it had to be right
    it was too magnifique

    What was it, this power
    to hold this world, apart and above
    I finally know, this hour
    it is love




    Submitted on 2009-06-15 20:26:06     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      love sucks!
    didn't you read my lyrics?
    im just kidding but i can't love "love" when it slapped me then kicked me when i was down!
    rachel:)
    | Posted on 2009-06-15 00:00:00 | by PopRocksRae | [ Reply to This ]


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