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    dots Submission Name: I sent you awaydots
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    Author: Dreamer5009
    ASL Info:    16, Male, USA
    Elite Ratio:    5.02 - 73/53/28
    Words: 68
    Class/Type: Poetry/Broken
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    dotsI sent you awaydots
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    I was so happy
    it was a beautiful day
    you thought it was too sappy
    I sent you away

    The sun rose up high
    as if, right there, it would stay
    you turned away with a sigh
    I sent you away

    I looked like something was amiss
    I asked you to help me find my way
    you leaned in for a kiss
    I sent you away




    Submitted on 2009-06-15 20:31:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I like this! lol This is tight work homey! I actually read it twice I liked it so much. The repetition was right in the pocket with how you tied it up with the irony at the end. Very nice...

    Brian Poem
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    | Posted on 2009-06-16 00:00:00 | by Brianpoem | [ Reply to This ]
      Short and to the point. You know what I read your bio and at your age you will have time for a deep type of love.
    | Posted on 2009-06-15 00:00:00 | by msmystic | [ Reply to This ]
      yeah!
    love SUCKS!
    im not kidding.im so done with watching my heart get broken!
    rachel:)
    | Posted on 2009-06-15 00:00:00 | by PopRocksRae | [ Reply to This ]


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