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    dots Submission Name: Squeak and Rabbitdots
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    Author: dismal_s child
    ASL Info:    19/F/On A Carousel
    Elite Ratio:    3.24 - 451/419/172
    Words: 139
    Class/Type: Poetry/
    Total Views: 875
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    Description:
       To my Rae!!


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    dotsSqueak and Rabbitdots
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    And when I passed that phase,
    You stood at my back.
    I was wearing just a summer dress,
    Crowing out some inane tune.
    You wore what you always did,
    Trust. And your heart on your sleave.
    my
    little
    sister.

    I smacked you one day,
    Square in the face.
    Remember? when you pissed me the fuck off?
    You smacked me back.
    Such a defiant little whack.
    And I realised we were now equals.
    my
    little
    sister.

    I saw my child's heartbeat.
    And was overwhelmed, yes, DROWNED!
    [with the same over-protective urge]
    That I felt as I stood in front of you,
    Taking the hit, and all the abuse.
    my
    little
    sister.

    Years from now,
    When we're Mom's and Auntie's age,
    Are we still gunna be us? Best Friends?
    my little sister.




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      yes sister!
    of course,
    me and you are so close and i love you more than anything.
    you portected me when i needed it and you trusted me when i needed that.

    you are my older sister but my closest friend.
    im so proud to be your sister!
    rachel:)
    aka
    your:poprox!
    | Posted on 2009-06-20 00:00:00 | by PopRocksRae | [ Reply to This ]
      God i hope so...i've worked all your lives to get you two to realise you are the best friends you will ever have.

    you were always there for your baby sister, Carrie, you always distracted her potential tormenters and protected her.

    and she has always looked up to you, and trusted and adored you. she is my littlest Goddess and my treasure. never leave her side, even if you live somewhere else.

    you are two halves of the same coin.
    | Posted on 2009-06-19 00:00:00 | by ruejacobs | [ Reply to This ]


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