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i gave you my heart everything i could our relationship fell apart you said you never would you looked me in the eyes told me i was your everything my eyes now filled with tears lookin in yours nothing is clear where did you go? why wasnt i there i feel so low i just want you near you lied and i still care losing you was my only fear my heart says no but my mind challenges a dare you didnt even fight didnt try to make it right i now lay alone tonight this bottle takes me a flight mind spinning crazy i feel nothing but pain my swollen eyes stare dazing am i the one to blame? what more could i have done i gave you my all i truley believed you were the one now whos going to catch me when i fall? |
I found something here that is down to Earth and easy for many people to relate to. A lot of people write the broken-hearted, pain pieces but don't begin to accomplish this. "you looked me in the eyes told me i was your everything my eyes now filled with tears lookin in yours nothing is clear" This was the first stanza that struck me! "Lookin in yours nothing is clear" is a place where a lot of people have found themselves and when reading this line will find themselves dwelling back in that moment when they felt the same way. Lines like "you lied and I still care" help to paint the picture as well as the reference to hitting the bottle while laying in the bed alone. This is simple yet powerful...And that's the type of poetry that speaks most! Brian Poem Spoken Word Is Alive! | Posted on 2009-06-16 00:00:00 | by Brianpoem | [ Reply to This ] | |