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what am i supposed to do?

Author: joezwells
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what am i supposed to do?

i gave you my heart
everything i could
our relationship fell apart
you said you never would

you looked me in the eyes
told me i was your everything
my eyes now filled with tears
lookin in yours nothing is clear

where did you go?
why wasnt i there
i feel so low
i just want you near

you lied and i still care
losing you was my only fear
my heart says no
but my mind challenges a dare

you didnt even fight
didnt try to make it right
i now lay alone tonight
this bottle takes me a flight

mind spinning crazy
i feel nothing but pain
my swollen eyes stare dazing
am i the one to blame?

what more could i have done
i gave you my all
i truley believed you were the one
now whos going to catch me when i fall?

Submitted on 2009-06-16 02:01:20     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I found something here that is down to Earth and easy for many people to relate to. A lot of people write the broken-hearted, pain pieces but don't begin to accomplish this.

"you looked me in the eyes
told me i was your everything
my eyes now filled with tears
lookin in yours nothing is clear"

This was the first stanza that struck me! "Lookin in yours nothing is clear" is a place where a lot of people have found themselves and when reading this line will find themselves dwelling back in that moment when they felt the same way.

Lines like "you lied and I still care" help to paint the picture as well as the reference to hitting the bottle while laying in the bed alone. This is simple yet powerful...And that's the type of poetry that speaks most!

Brian Poem
Spoken Word Is Alive!
| Posted on 2009-06-16 00:00:00 | by Brianpoem | [ Reply to This ]

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