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    dots Submission Name: One Waydots
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    Author: BlazeFlamme
    ASL Info:    22/m/TX
    Elite Ratio:    1.8 - 23/161/138
    Words: 233
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 428
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1452



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       I just found this on my laptop. I wrote it awhile back somewhere I didn't have internet to post it but I forgot about it.


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    dotsOne Waydots
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    Get out of my head
    I don't want you anymore
    Overwhelm me with defeat
    By reminding me of before

    Your logic is weak
    Emotions are your wind
    They guide you on your path
    But lead you to the end

    The world isn't over yet
    Just because you feel
    You just lack the strength to stand
    You would rather kneel

    You crawl on your belly
    And beckon me to follow
    But I'm going to shine
    I'm done feeling hollow

    I've put my foot down
    I am no longer in need of you
    I may want what you want
    But I don't fold as you do

    And so leave me in peace
    For you are unwelcome here
    I can accept heartbreak
    Without wallowing in fear

    And so I'm walking forward
    You can stay if you must
    But if she comes back it's to me
    Not to some fool wanting lust

    But if she should choose not to
    I'm not going to roll over and die
    I've done all I know I can
    And thus I will hold my head up high

    Nothing happens out of pity
    That card is overused
    Your road is long and lonely
    I won't be confused

    So in the end I will lead
    You may follow if you can
    And learn that confidence is key
    Not being a shell of a man




    Submitted on 2009-06-16 05:24:22     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is nice. It personifies the feeling and rhymes! I also like the positive vibe, that you are moving forward, a stronger person. Good job!
    | Posted on 2009-06-16 00:00:00 | by isis_lenore | [ Reply to This ]


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