When I first read this, I felt a warm shiver run through me. I don't know how to explain it, but I love pieces that are short and to the point, but still express all the emotion in the world. Particularly ones about love. They're sort of like escapism for me, a little sanctuary away from the reality of some crummy relationships.
I like the free flow of the second stanza. Perhaps, if I may suggest it, you could think about changing the first stanza to match the second... it doesn't have to keep a constant beat.
It's a beautiful piece, I hope that someday I might find someone who reminds me of it.
Submission Name: Burning
