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    dots Submission Name: Dual identities Chapter 1dots
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    Author: trapt87
    ASL Info:    16/male/indiana
    Elite Ratio:    1.45 - 2/3/9
    Words: 613
    Class/Type: Story/Serious
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    Average Vote:    4.0000
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    Description:
       bruce is real popular at school hes smart funny etc but he has a alternet personality named Peter whos a psychopath

    Side note:the characters moriah and Hunter are based on a firend of mine whos chat name is far cry from truth


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    dotsDual identities Chapter 1dots
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    Bruce smiled at his current girlfirend,alyssa, and then turned his attention back to driving and sighed and thought about tonight there was a mad party and he couldnt wait for it. He smiled at alyssa again and headed towards his house he sighed and took her up stairs and kissed her

    When bruce woke up he was laying next to alyssa and they were naked, he sighed and went to the bathroom feeling a slight headache he looked at himself in the mirror and sighed. He took another look at himself then thought 'how the hell did i end up like this' he decided to take some tylenol to help the headache but after he swalloed a couple of the tiny pills his headache semed to worsen he sat down in the living room sighing he closed his eyes as the headache seemed to go away and he slept peacefully.


    After waking up his headache had disapeared and for that fact he was glad but he thought alyssa would have woken up by now. Deciding to head upstairs Bruce smiled again He knew he was popular and everything but he still couldnt belive that shed actually agreed to go out with him. It seemed like just yesterday that he'd been stuttering He thought back to the day he'd asked her out for the first time and how they became one of the most popular couples according to the year book.

    Bruce looked at her and smiled she didnt now he was watching her and he prefered it that way he could ask any girl out but for some reason he couldnt aks this one girl out,it fustrated the hell out of him. He wished he could understand why he couldnt talk to this one girl, but then he realized something all he had to do was pretend she was another girl, but he quickly dismissed the idea it sounded so stupid he mentally kicked himself what was wwrong with him? He wasnt a shy person but he couldnt say two words to this girl.

    Alyssa smiled softly,she knew he was watching and trying to ask her out. She wished he would because she would say yes truth is she liked him, a lot, hes probably the only guy she would say yes to but for some reason he was just to shy to ask her maybe she should as him, she nodded hoping he'd catch the drift.

    Fortunatley he caught the drift and walked over to her and said "umm i was jjust wondering if youd like to go out with me" He looked at her as she smiled and said "id love to"

    He was brought out of his memories by her voice "hey love" she said walking up to him, she was fully dressed now and she looked even more stunning now she was about 5 foot 5 with short blonde hair and blue eyes. He smiled as he kissed her "have a nice nap" he asked looking at her and smiled. he on the other hand was 6 foot 3 with short red hair and brown eyes they were both althetic built but she wasnt as bulky as he was, but he was nt to bulky but he was strong,and pretty fast. He smiled and kissed her again and said "come on lets go out and eat" She looked at him and sai "that sounds good". Smiling he led her to the car he frowned slightly,his headache had returned.




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