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    Author: Yenrx
    ASL Info:    17/Male/WA
    Elite Ratio:    2.59 - 2/2/3
    Words: 106
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 96
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       I did this one as a school project. I hope you like it, please comment on it. I am always trying new ideas for my poems.


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    I was young that day
    When the world stopped turning
    Now I am old and gray
    But the world is still burning
    I had no way of knowing
    That the world had turned away
    Now I am always going
    Trying to find home every day
    This world is lost to me
    But I rule on in this land
    There is not much to do or see
    But the world will change with my hand
    I will bring an age of joy
    In this land of ice and cold
    Back to the days when I was a boy
    So others will not have to grow old
    -Yenrx




    Submitted on 2009-06-17 01:17:04     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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