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    Author: dannyshyboy
    ASL Info:    23/m/fl
    Elite Ratio:    5.24 - 140/92/24
    Words: 183
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
    Total Views: 57
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    request
    by danny




    such a hand
    which my fingers are entangled in-
    is but the love divorcing me;
    as gentle as the screams of a person assassinated.

    entering the mind of a pandemic,
    a dilatation around me and i must keep myself unharmed.
    the only request i have is to dry my tears in the rain
    because i am ever so joyous.

    such a hand
    which my fingers have left loose
    is but the hate surrounding my heart.
    i weep for i am not distraught
    i prey to die a crucial death
    to be replaced.

    the sounds of vitiation permiate thru my every breath-
    an immunity to noxiousness.
    i am the viator, sound until nox leaves me.

    such a hand
    which my fingers long for
    is but provided residually
    i render a prodigy
    which vilifies what is left of my pride.
    that which has broken me down,
    down into the strong individual i am
    jaded by jeremiad.

    perseverance, instauration-
    as all i have eschewed becomes the oppressor;
    instatuquo i profess orphanage.




    Submitted on 2009-06-17 02:36:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This poem here of your has defiantly a lot of saddness inside of it. And a very unique ways of words to define some form of saddness that is, a bit, well lets just say I could feel the hurt inside of this poem. At the end "I profess orphange." It just sounds like, neglect.

    I could be wrong.

    I felt a slow and long weep of sorrow inside of your words on this one, and I can't seem to comprehend the feeling, for I have never had a writting touch me as well as yours has today.

    Nice work here. Def a favorite.
    | Posted on 2009-06-19 00:00:00 | by Crestfallenman | [ Reply to This ]



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