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    dots Submission Name: a telltale of decemberdots

    Author: Soldier O_Tears
    ASL Info:    18/M/INDONESIA
    Elite Ratio:    2.25 - 41/129/120
    Words: 210
    Class/Type: Prose/Satire
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    dotsa telltale of decemberdots

    i set myself on alert state
    which keeps my eyes from running out of time
    i keep a distance from sleeping pleasure
    and all other substances which makes me yawning

    i watch recorded match over and over again
    savor the flavor of night newsreader
    perfect figure
    fueled by endless caffeine and novocaine
    i let myself drown into consciousness drain

    deals of intricate spoken words
    broadcast through radio device
    enunciation of insignificance confession drills into my membrane

    set of unknown sightings occurs before my vision
    dark shades and blinding rays of mysterious creatures
    voices behind the walls and series of sourceless calling pounding my head like a Sunday morning bell

    By the time i realize my painkiller has nothing to left
    They begin to appear at speed of light
    in forms of unspeakable monstrosities and inexplicable figures.

    Outnumbered by them then i ran out of the room and call for help but no one answers
    then i remember
    it's in the middle of cold December and everybody out of town

    So i let my flesh consumed by those invisible entity which no beauty could put a name on each of them
    then dry out outside and afterward evaporates into the thin air

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