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    dots Submission Name: Feverdots
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    Author: Passionbyapathy
    ASL Info:    18/M/Ohio State
    Elite Ratio:    6.06 - 174/189/127
    Words: 58
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 45
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 426



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    dotsFeverdots
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    Quite often
    whilst you sleep
    I wonder
    if your weary heart
    in simple slumber
    doth surround herself
    with sweet dreams
    against the rasp of night
    sugar-spooned on bitter dreary
    glaring, leery, forever lost
    in fantasy
    your heart would beat
    your body heat
    aglow in fever sweat
    tethered to my tangled frame
    a mess of me and you




    Submitted on 2009-06-18 03:13:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This is beautiful sir. It's a shame none have commented thus far.

    I have very little to say, and this is the first piece I've commented on in perhaps years, but I have some small advice. The piece seems rather flawless in my eyes, however I'd suggest a pinch of punctuation.

    Other than that, it's one of the better things I've read in a long while.

    | Posted on 2009-08-30 00:00:00 | by Sheakhan | [ Reply to This ]


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