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    dots Submission Name: Photographsdots
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    Author: totojane03
    ASL Info:    25- colorado springs
    Elite Ratio:    3.95 - 151/77/35
    Words: 404
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsPhotographsdots
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    Yesterday when I'd gotten home I was hoping you were there- but you were still gone.... So I sat at the kitchen table, and grabed our old photo album while I waited-
    I even warmed up some coffee...and I remember wishing So impacintly for the time to just pass by quickly,- As I started to filp threw the pages of old photographs,
    I had stumbled arcossed one that brought me back to the very first day we met...
    Oh...whoa...And I know we were so Young back then....Oh yeah..back then.............
    As I shook my head And I took a good look around...And A deep breath in...
    Wishing you were at home with me now----
    I siped my coffee as I Continued to turn the pages of our old photo album.........
    It sure was'nt long before I stumbled across
    The photo of us on our wedding day,
    Taking me back on a journey to that purfect memorie-
    and just remembering how you grabed my hand and knelt to your knees-
    Saying that you can't promies me the world --
    But I'll always be your princess and your baby girl-- and you'll love me forever and always--
    So much.....oh....whoa.....yeah...............
    I remember I was siting there smiling with tears falling from my eyes, Wondering how I could be so lucky to have you in my life....
    And before I knew it you were siting right at my side wipeing away my tears ---- that
    Sennt me on a journey back to when we first met---And oh we were so young back then---
    Making me realize all the goodtimes we still have left---
    And I can't promise you the world boy----
    But I can promies that I'll aways be your princess and your baby girl......And your baby girl----------------------------------------
    Shortly after you joined me at the table-- together we looked at old photo graphs,
    Laughing to all these preciouse memories....
    As I smiled and told myself--
    Oneday I'm going to journey back to this moment and I know I'm going to want this back-- As we keet getting older I'll be wishing that time wouldnt have gone by so fast- Leaving faded memories.....That take us on A journey back to the first day we met..........Oh..Whoa...yea yeah.......
    I can't promise you the world -----
    But I can promise that I will always be your princess and your baby girl......whoa.....Yeah...





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      I liked the repeated lines. They allowed for a break in the "plot" of it, but they made it a better read and empahsized the feelings behind the "story" and those words.

    :)
    | Posted on 2009-06-29 00:00:00 | by ImperfectGirl1 | [ Reply to This ]
      Not only are images stored in photographs, but priceless memories as well!

    Your verse makes for a very sentimental journey here. Nice work!
    | Posted on 2009-06-24 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]


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