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    dots Submission Name: Don't Godots
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    Author: Kaygrl
    ASL Info:    19/female/Washington
    Elite Ratio:    2.31 - 153/196/213
    Words: 150
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 53
    Average Vote:    3.5000
    Bytes: 758



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    dotsDon't Godots
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    I don’t wanna live without you but I am,
    I don’t wanna feel this pain, but I do,
    I don’t wanna see you loving her… but you are,
    And I don’t wanna cry anymore but I am.
    Please don’t leave me all alone in this cold world,
    You’re all I have left to hang onto,
    And I don’t want you to go,
    No I don’t want you to go.
    I didn’t wanna hear those words but I did,
    I didn’t wanna sit and say nothing but I did,
    I didn’t wanna beg on my knees but I am,
    And I didn’t wanna have her as an ally but she is.
    Please don’t turn away from me,
    When you’re the only one who listens,
    You’re my last thread of sanity,
    Don’t go, please,
    Don’t go.




    Submitted on 2009-06-18 15:56:51     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This sounds the opposite of what I expected from your profile picture, unfortunately.
    Poetry-wise, it is very honest. The answer back-style writing is interesting. Especially the part mentioned about "her" being an "ally." Sounds like quite the sticky situation.
    Human to human-wise, this sounds terrible and something I've similarly endured before. Extra brownie points for relation! And best wishes for the cheering up of your heart.
    No doubt, you have some "listening" here on this internet website. Godspeed.
    | Posted on 2009-06-20 00:00:00 | by harrieart | [ Reply to This ]


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