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    dots Submission Name: Cascade dots
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    Author: silverpen
    ASL Info:    16/F/Right Behind You
    Elite Ratio:    3.47 - 16/34/31
    Words: 106
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nostalgia
    Total Views: 60
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 693



    Description:
       My journal poem. Changed a thing or two.


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    dotsCascade dots
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    If it fell from the sky
    Not like rain
    But like a drop of blood
    Could you catch it
    On your tongue?

    If it hurt your ears
    Like the screech of a train
    Running off the tracks
    Like the howl
    Of an abandoned mother
    Would you listen?

    If it burned your eyes
    Like the bright sun
    So beautiful but painful,
    Forbidden to stare at,
    Could you ever possibly
    Stand to look?

    The pain of the world
    What if it fell
    On your shoulders?
    Like a desperate man
    And his bottle of booze
    Would you chug the fire
    Or break what is fragile?




    Submitted on 2009-06-19 12:41:06     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i likie it mucho pen my dear, it flows along right nice and the meaning i get from it is put forth in a vivid manner
    all-in-all it rox just like u
    ^_^
    | Posted on 2009-06-19 00:00:00 | by Renada | [ Reply to This ]


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