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    Author: Monsun
    ASL Info:    17/Male/Berlin Germany
    Elite Ratio:    2.27 - 17/18/15
    Words: 138
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    I sit here and try
    I site and cry

    You tell me its all my fault
    you say everything is my fault

    you hate the one i love
    but yet you want from me love

    countless times you have pushed me
    countless times I've seen the edge for me

    Cut after cut, I feel the pain
    i escape the pain you use to reign

    I scream SAVE ME, but its like no one hears
    i grind my nails in to the dirt but no one cares those are my fears.

    You feed me lies
    you feed my cries

    but who cares the one that does
    the one who does is also the one you hate she does.

    and for this i feel my pain
    because this is my mothers reign




    Submitted on 2009-06-19 15:53:15     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      your rhyming is cool.And the poem has feeling.
    | Posted on 2009-06-20 00:00:00 | by ratava | [ Reply to This ]


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