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    dots Submission Name: I'll be ok without your lies.dots
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    Author: Fadeintoreality
    Elite Ratio:    1.95 - 33/114/64
    Words: 80
    Class/Type: Poetry/Angry
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    dotsI'll be ok without your lies.dots
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    you break
    me
    down
    do you see?
    I once
    love you
    more
    but now,
    its over
    done
    and finished
    I don't blame
    you
    but myself
    yes
    for I stayed
    long enough
    to be a fool
    I knew
    saw
    tasted
    what you did
    but I stayed
    closer
    crying
    inside my head
    because I
    wanted
    you
    forever as mine
    and now its
    over
    done
    and finished
    and maybe
    one
    day
    I'll be okay
    without you
    and
    your little
    lies.




    Submitted on 2009-06-20 10:42:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      i love how you wrote it.
    you are an amazing poet.
    although i found it hard to pay attention to your point..your end wrapped it together.
    keep it up!
    rachel:)
    | Posted on 2009-06-20 00:00:00 | by PopRocksRae | [ Reply to This ]


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