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    dots Submission Name: Chocolate Milk, Firty-fivedots
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    Author: captureyourself
    ASL Info:    20/F/Sactown
    Elite Ratio:    3.13 - 42/61/52
    Words: 86
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsChocolate Milk, Firty-fivedots
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    Chocolate milk, firtyfive
    I remember the good times
    Life now, can we take a bow
    Can someone say wow
    People moving, friends changing
    Still we remain unchanged
    Party's, jobs, and our entourage
    I'll never forget you
    Halloween and vomit boy
    mmm damn boy that was good
    Kick it spots and music blaring
    Everyone was staring
    There were good times
    There were bad times
    But I'm much happier here
    Our life was crazy, I'm glad it's over
    Let's start our new life sober
    Love ya long time




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      FURTY FIVE!!! heck yea doggie. this poem rocks. we are freaking insane crazy biotches!!

    chocolate milk furty five
    sober but still kickin it live
    vomit boy took a dive
    ate those chunks
    then we ditched those punks
    fought but made up an all that junk
    now we're friends and you are stuck
    walking around with our middle finger up
    if you dont like us..tough
    everyone loves us and cant get enough
    our lives are rough
    but fukc it we are buff
    we both changed big time
    but we will never forget are stupid ass ryhmes
    forever partners in crime
    badass for life, love you long time

    love BFFFL!!!



    | Posted on 2009-06-24 00:00:00 | by joezwells | [ Reply to This ]


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