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    dots Submission Name: Hiding Behind...dots
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    Author: silverpen
    ASL Info:    16/F/Right Behind You
    Elite Ratio:    3.47 - 16/34/31
    Words: 416
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 65
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 2486



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    dotsHiding Behind...dots
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    Fear is our commodity
    Becoming humanity’s oddity
    Pre-existent in every place.
    Its face cannot be avoided
    And its mind cannot be broken
    Fear will be there to support you
    In your happiest moments.
    It wraps a finger in your hair
    Being your second lover,
    Your one-on-the-side;
    Fear falls between the spaces
    And fills in the blank pages
    That your good mood has left behind.

    <| FILE: motion log 92746.88; user name: Mercy Mercury |>
    Entry no. 1; path name: fear_brings; --
    ERROR; ERROR
    <path name invalid>

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    Today, I saw something that made me think. I saw someone milling about outside of the adoption center-- she seemed to be a little flustered, as if there was a fly buzzing in her ear. I was watching out of the window since I work there. I noticed a lot of little bumpy marks and scratches on the crooks of her elbows and a sickly pallor making her cheeks sink inwards… a drug user? That was all I could guess. Her face was dim and depressed until a young couple came out of the adoption center front doors. They were carrying a bundle, a baby. I saw its hands reach out of the soft blue material and clutch in the air towards this odd looking woman, and she reached out a bony finger and stroked its cheek with so much love -- so much desire -- that there was no way they weren’t connected. When the tears spilled over I thought she must be its mother. Then the young couple got in a hurry and climbed inside of an expensive looking car. As it drove away, I saw the drug abusing mother reach out her hand after the trunk of this car. Her knees failed, and she fell. I watched her kneeling there with her hands together for quite a long time before I needed to go back to work.

    There are no better ways to describe the pain of love than what I witnessed her-

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    A moment’s notice
    Gave away the fear falling inside
    Leaving only one emotion;
    A scar. Unhealed. Burning.
    So no matter how you smile,
    No matter how often
    No matter if it’s true or fake.
    There will be another presence there,
    One that exists everywhere.
    Fear of it all going wrong,
    And the terrorizing reality
    Of accepting the consequences of love.
    Yet still…
    We trudge on
    We victims.




    Submitted on 2009-06-20 22:42:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      We are all victims is not the case. The day we believe we are not just puppets of the stage set is the day we understand the worth of existence.

    There are events which take place in life which make one lead to intense conclusions. If we were to decide the story by a moment, then it would be no more than fiction.

    Finally, talking about existence. I can't say anything about where we start from. There is no logical explanation to that. However, the way we are or become is to a great extent governed by us. The role of luck is definitely there. But one can't always say its just luck.

    Regards,
    AbsolutelyLost
    | Posted on 2009-07-06 00:00:00 | by AbsolutelyLost | [ Reply to This ]
      wow... this is... I am speechless. I would also love to steal your talent.. Amazing how you wrote this... great post

    Jackz
    | Posted on 2009-07-05 00:00:00 | by jackz | [ Reply to This ]
      0_0" A....W.....E....SOME! I want to steal your talent, it's sooo good! MUST HAVE MORE! *Zombie look on face* 0;_;0
    | Posted on 2009-07-02 00:00:00 | by Scaredheart | [ Reply to This ]


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