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    dots Submission Name: dear daddots
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    Author: joezwells
    Elite Ratio:    3.79 - 64/79/55
    Words: 165
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    Description:
       for my dad on fathers day!


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    dotsdear daddots
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    you stood by my side and I donít know why
    I looked you in the eyes an I flat out lied
    the truth I always tried to hide
    and the disappointment leaked through your eyes

    too many times I let you down
    most of the time you didnít make a sound
    to my mistakes I now am bound
    and when I finally fell you didnít let me hit the ground

    I wouldnít be here today if it wasnít for you
    Iím sitting here sober and I owe it to you
    I more than appreciate everything you do
    I need you more than ever and words cant describe how much I love you

    Dad: Iím so sorry for all the years of lies
    I cant tell you how many times I have cried
    hurting you has made my old self die
    you are the reason I gave this new life a try
    Thank you!





    Submitted on 2009-06-20 23:32:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I love this poem, it speks true of me too in a since, alot of sons feel like they failed their dads and I am one of them but only now we must rise and ask God to help us redeem ourselves in their eyes. This is a great poem and I appreciate the heary behind it. Kepp writing good work.

    P.S. thanks for the kind complements
    | Posted on 2009-07-01 00:00:00 | by Doublefeather | [ Reply to This ]
      I absolutely love this poem it was very heart felt. love ya long time.
    | Posted on 2009-06-22 00:00:00 | by captureyourself | [ Reply to This ]


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