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dear dad

Author: joezwells
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for my dad on fathers day!

dear dad

you stood by my side and I don’t know why
I looked you in the eyes an I flat out lied
the truth I always tried to hide
and the disappointment leaked through your eyes

too many times I let you down
most of the time you didn’t make a sound
to my mistakes I now am bound
and when I finally fell you didn’t let me hit the ground

I wouldn’t be here today if it wasn’t for you
I’m sitting here sober and I owe it to you
I more than appreciate everything you do
I need you more than ever and words cant describe how much I love you

Dad: I’m so sorry for all the years of lies
I cant tell you how many times I have cried
hurting you has made my old self die
you are the reason I gave this new life a try
Thank you!

Submitted on 2009-06-20 23:32:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I love this poem, it speks true of me too in a since, alot of sons feel like they failed their dads and I am one of them but only now we must rise and ask God to help us redeem ourselves in their eyes. This is a great poem and I appreciate the heary behind it. Kepp writing good work.

P.S. thanks for the kind complements
| Posted on 2009-07-01 00:00:00 | by Doublefeather | [ Reply to This ]
  I absolutely love this poem it was very heart felt. love ya long time.
| Posted on 2009-06-22 00:00:00 | by captureyourself | [ Reply to This ]

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