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    dots Submission Name: Your Sunken Citiesdots
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    Author: Cloacina
    ASL Info:    25/F/KY
    Elite Ratio:    5.24 - 20/53/54
    Words: 222
    Class/Type: Poetry/
    Total Views: 64
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1587



    Description:
       Not about an actual person who has been murdered. A bit more general, though, personalized.


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    dotsYour Sunken Citiesdots
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    When you kill a man,
    a world dies with him.
    Sunken cities lost in time
    and memory
    lie buried with the bones of yesterday.
    Somewhere past the distance
    and the dust
    there lies unseen
    the crumble of white ruins
    where life once thrived.
    The halls are empty now,
    the floors are bare,
    so still the feet,
    the only music that still plays,
    is the echo of your knock
    on empty walls,
    and the whistle of the wind,
    eating through
    the emptiness.
    Oh,
    the revelry has ceased,
    the secret knowledge,
    lost to the rest of known history,
    a culture has come undone,
    the spirit of the time
    if it is anywhere,
    it carries on
    somewhere else.
    And he who lived among the bones,
    is lost to that world now,
    a king,
    abdicated,
    torn down,
    unknown.
    A whole universe has been blotted
    from the earth,
    and I wonder,
    how fickle is the sky
    of life?
    Does he still dance there,
    does he still dream,
    has the world really vanished,
    or has it just moved,
    like Atlantis,
    hidden beneath a sea,
    too deep
    for flesh
    to reach?
    Please tell me,
    when I am strong enough,
    when I am ready
    to dive deep,
    I will find you
    living still,
    just a planet out of orbit,
    still turning,
    sun still burning,
    just temporarily
    out of my
    reach.




    Submitted on 2009-06-21 15:17:36     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I liked this :) Im dont usually connect very well with pieces that dont rhyme, but the imagery you have used here actually won me over. "The Whistle of the wind, eating through the emptyness" I can image such a desolate place, that used to thrive, but now left to rot...and the only sound tht covers its walls is that of the wind slowly eroding it away until there is nothing left. I always think when i see other people, going about their daily business...that they are leading their own life, so similar to mine, yet so distant...and how simple single actions can cause a giant rift from the norm.
    Thanks for restoring my faith in non rhyming poems. The imagery was fab, and well worth the read :)

    Ryan aka Master Raz
    | Posted on 2009-06-22 00:00:00 | by master raz | [ Reply to This ]



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