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    dots Submission Name: In the oceandots
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    Author: EEKS
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    Words: 190
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsIn the oceandots
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    In my dream we were swimming in the ocean
    But I knew I must be sleeping because
    I know that we are done
    but we were swimming in the ocean
    and you held out your hand
    and in the moment, it seemed so perfect
    so worth it to reach out and take it
    I must've forgotten
    but in my dream you kept you eyes on me
    You held me tighter as the sea kissed our knees
    and in my sleep, everything you told me
    was so easy to believe
    I guess I'd just forgotten
    that its over with you and me
    because when you took my hand
    I thought "He is the perfect man for me"
    I guess I had just forgotten
    but now my eyes are open and
    I am still lost in the ocean
    We were swimming and I knew we weren't going to sink too deep
    because you had a hold of me
    and I know, I know it was just a dream
    but every word you told me I believed
    I wish nothing had changed
    I wish we were still swimming





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