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    dots Submission Name: Iran Reneweddots
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    Author: realpoet
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    dotsIran Reneweddots
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    Iran, a beautiful country,
    with beautiful hearts and ideas
    chortling with thoughted opines
    as if life has no fears.

    Some, its people, grasp not
    its corals in need repair
    where long the sheep left unsheared
    long for a breath of fresh air.

    The governing have sense of loath
    to sheer the sheep and spin new cloth ,
    to them its a sense of violate
    when the victims can laugh and cheer.

    Yet with the flagship of centuries mourned
    the Imams sense need of new day dawned
    but are beholden to ageless fears
    that Allah dries none the tears.

    The people shout-
    The people shout-
    The people ever shout-
    Don't we,too, hear Allah's peaceful call.




    Submitted on 2009-06-23 00:12:05     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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