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    Author: Fadeintoreality
    Elite Ratio:    1.95 - 33/114/64
    Words: 227
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsto scareddots
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    I shielded my face from the sun
    Too afraid to run
    I stood there in shame, hiding from truth
    Disrespecting His name

    I stood there in shame, and held my hands to my face
    Covering up tears with my blood soaked hands.
    My hate and indiscretion showed that day
    As the young man lay
    The man that took my brothers life
    The man who has a wife,
    A son and a daughter.
    I washed away this mans sins with his blood
    Rather than with Holy Water.

    I hide my face with guilt and shame.
    For a man who was drunk took my brother's life.
    A man who had two children,
    And a loving wife.

    She rushed to his side,
    Asking me WHY?
    As she held him in her hands,
    She sat there and cried.

    Unable to speak,
    She slapped me with her hand.
    Leaving an angry, red hand print
    to remind me of my hate.

    She cried to me,
    "You've killed the wrong man!"

    "What?"
    What have I done?!
    What have I done to this man I didn't know?
    I took his life
    For I thought he was the one who took my brother's soul?

    I knelt there with gun in hand
    Too guilty to run,
    I held it to my head
    Not one man lay,
    But two lay dead.




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      omg.
    i loved it.
    it was powerful and moving and amazing well written and im going to add it as my favortie cus it is incredible.
    rachel:)
    | Posted on 2009-06-23 00:00:00 | by PopRocksRae | [ Reply to This ]


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