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    dots Submission Name: Let Me Take You Back dots
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    Author: Kaygrl
    ASL Info:    19/female/Washington
    Elite Ratio:    2.31 - 153/196/213
    Words: 657
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 48
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 3434



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    Memories keep assaulting me…
    Do you remember? Let me take you back.
    The time you cried because you didn’t want to lose me?
    We weren’t even dating yet.
    The time you brought me roses?
    Said, here’s to the first twenty four hours.
    What about the time you said you would never run from me?
    Or how you wished you could hold me and hold me until your arms fell off,
    Or death took you from me?
    Thinking back, it’s a trip.
    Do you remember? When you first met me,
    It was so… awesome.
    Across the room we knew… we knew.
    Do you remember the first time I went to your house?
    Said there was an angel in your kitchen, and I blushed…
    Told you no way.
    You told me I was perfect.
    I told you I wasn’t, and you still saw me the same.
    Do you remember my fear?
    How hard you worked so I would let you in?
    We used to talk every morning, and every night, until the Nazi took it away.
    You used to come see me whenever possible.
    Do you remember my smile?
    I remember you. I’ll never forget.
    What about the way you used to look at me?
    And when you kissed me…
    It was like it was just us.
    The weekend at your house…
    Still the best one of my life.
    Do you remember what we went through? All the walls we built up and broke through?
    How I sang you the perfect song that I loved so much… it reminded me of you…
    And you started to cry… you told me you fell in love with me all over again.
    I melted and I wished I could stay with you forever, But I had to go home.
    We used to laugh, we used to smile.
    You would bring me chocolate, I used to call you my chocolate bar.
    I trusted you, you never set a foot wrong.
    I gave you all that was left of me… I gave you my everything.
    We never fought not once, and I trusted you to call you crying…
    That’s never happened. I only call my girls when that happens.
    But I trusted you… I trusted you to love me like you said you did…
    Said you would.
    Remember? You took my breath away every time you kissed me.
    You made me feel so beautiful… you looked at me and saw me.
    I remember… I remember so well.
    I remember the day you said you loved me,
    It was so fast, so soon,
    But I felt the same.
    Remember the day I said I love you,
    And you were happy in every way, you said?
    You went home and told your mom…
    I was so sure it was the right thing to say,
    And now… now it’s all gone and changed.
    Why did you let it slip away? I still felt the fire burning hot,
    And the fact that you couldn’t see me killed it?
    I realize it’s hard, but it shouldn’t have changed.
    It was only two weeks. Two small weeks, and a hundred years passed for you.
    You don’t want me anymore.
    I miss the way you said you loved me… I could believe it then.
    I miss your strong arms around me… I miss you.
    I remember every day… I have to fight it every day,
    And moving on seems so effortless to you.
    But I’m stuck here in the past… being assaulted by memories…
    That only bring pain because you’re gone.
    You over there loving another,
    And I’m here… still loving you.




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      i loved this well wrote. keep up the good work . when you get a chance please read and comment on my newwest peoms
    thank you
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    | Posted on 2009-06-24 00:00:00 | by sparkleshine | [ Reply to This ]


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