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Author: manderz_1207
ASL Info:    15/f/mi
Elite Ratio:    5.45 - 95 /109 /38
Words: 71
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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im new at this... any comments as to improvement?


teach me!
teach me how to love you,
teach me how to care.
teach me how to miss you,
when your not here.
teach me of your gentle touch,
and how you get to care so much.
how you make it day by day,
and figure out just what to say.
I shall learn these things of you,
and maybe someday ill love you ,
the way you love me too.

Submitted on 2004-07-17 16:20:35     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  wow i see that you didnt aquire your writing skills as you went you were always good at this. This was so much better than my first poem. I also am going to add this pne as one of my faves.

| Posted on 2005-10-20 00:00:00 | by luvy | [ Reply to This ] speachless...i really liked this...ill set it up as one of my favorites. Welcome to the site and for your first poem its really good

~ Rogue~

Welcome to the site.
| Posted on 2004-07-17 00:00:00 | by Rogue | [ Reply to This ]

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