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    dots Submission Name: my final resting placedots
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    Author: Monsun
    ASL Info:    17/Male/Berlin Germany
    Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 16/17/13
    Words: 333
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 71
    Average Vote:    4.5000
    Bytes: 1938



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    dotsmy final resting placedots
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    Somthings wrong i can feel it
    i can feel the tide eroding the sand i stand on
    eroding my foundation i stand on
    I feel something moving, im dying bit by bit

    How can you say its right
    how can you watch as they die
    to fullfil this lie
    how can you say its right?

    I know you can see
    i know you feel
    I know you feel
    I know you can see

    And yet you ignore

    Watch the streams stain
    watch the tool cut deeper
    watch the life leave faster
    watch as life obstains

    and yet you ignore

    You say you want happiness
    You say you want me to fullfill
    you say my soul i kill
    and you punish with bliss

    I know you can see
    i know you feel
    I know you feel
    I know you can see

    And yet you ignore

    I am down to one strand
    I am left with just the edge
    one more push and im over the edge
    and under my feet there is not land

    I reach for hope
    you slash my last attempt
    to free my self, one last attempt
    to reach my hope

    You cant stop me
    you cant make me quit
    i refuse to give in bit by bit
    I have my hope, i will fight your sea

    I am happy with her
    it will be you filled with fear
    it will be you who asks to leave from here
    I am so much happier with her

    I know you can see
    i know you feel
    I know you feel
    I know you can see

    And you cant ignore

    She is my life
    and longer can you stop me
    try and see
    for here it was worth it, all my strife

    She is my Final resting Place
    No longer am i in my moseleum of pain
    I have regained
    My Final Grace, my perfect resting place.




    Submitted on 2009-06-23 16:40:36     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i like this it is very well wrote and personal to you . great job keep writing . if u can please s top by my [age and commetn my work thank you
    | Posted on 2009-06-25 00:00:00 | by sparkleshine | [ Reply to This ]
      Jeff, it's touching. I'm not sure how to say what I feel for this, you make me feel so loved that it's unfair to everyone else I know. I love you so much, I want nothing more thna ot be near you day and night. Despite my short attention span, I could spend hours with you, hearing all you have to say, and never grow wery of it. You make my life worht living, you make the hell I was born in a Heaven t live in, you correct my problems and your words move my soul to love. Your voice brings tears to my eye's, tears of everlasting love. I never want ti to fade, but if it should I will always have your arms to remind me of what you have siad so many times before. I only wish that we could see each other everyday and touch each others souls more. I wish I felt like I have earned having your lvoe, but I'm yet to feel that way, more thanl likely I never will. But I am content to know I have it.
    | Posted on 2009-06-23 00:00:00 | by Scaredheart | [ Reply to This ]


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