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    dots Submission Name: spinning junedots
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    Author: meoww
    Elite Ratio:    6.75 - 262/258/143
    Words: 72
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    Description:
       written last june.
    in another time, another house.

    eh.


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    dotsspinning junedots
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    french doors, pierced
    by saffron light: i stand,
    chatter to the birds, find relief
    in the vastness of sky
    as shelter, as twine
    enveloped in spider fingers,
    weaving, weaving.

    i brush the breeze aside,
    still this nervous house,
    this house of dreams reflected
    in quiet deliverance; time
    to clink my glass, spill drops
    in libation: thank the unseen stars
    for all of this, for all of this.




    Submitted on 2009-06-24 09:09:02     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      The last line with a double "for all of this" sounds slightly off.

    | Posted on 2009-07-17 00:00:00 | by Maverique | [ Reply to This ]
      "as twine
    enveloped in spider fingers,
    weaving, weaving."

    Somehow, this line gives me a really nice feeling. The image it instills...it's as if you are in the claw of something odd...something alien...but they are gentle, loving claws.

    -
    Claws and tarsus, weaving me, I am no longer the same man. Ignorance woven into loving and knowing. Octovision shows me the Sun in all his glory.

    Waving in the wind but holding strong, holding onto life...holding onto these golden threads.
    -
    'Arachnid of Tarsus', written by Asiaticfox for Jason Morales, 06/25/09.

    | Posted on 2009-06-25 00:00:00 | by AsiaticFox | [ Reply to This ]
      i remember this.

    i also know this, this spinning feeling.
    and there are moments when all the world is right and nothing is off center.

    maybe i am selfish. when i speak of the world, i always say my world. but is all i know.

    this poem is grace to me.
    and a thank you for what is and what isn't.

    i commented on this the last time i think. (or maybe wanted to). and i am so rusty at lending any words. (i have very few these days).

    but i have always enjoyed your voice. admired it. have seen it grow and change. and most days, where you are concerned, i say poet.

    so yea. unspecified. just like i like em.

    | Posted on 2009-06-24 00:00:00 | by isabella | [ Reply to This ]


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