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    dots Submission Name: Matedots
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    Author: ThePuppet
    Elite Ratio:    2.74 - 2/2/1
    Words: 187
    Class/Type: Story/Romance
    Total Views: 70
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1065



    Description:
       It's a short story. . .still working on it. Anyways, it's simply about a girl having to prepare herself for choosing a mate and the complications that would take place if she went with the wrong one.


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    dotsMatedots
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    I smelled the stale beer and velvet cake long before the park pavilion emerged in dark relief from the blue-green shadows that surrounded it. I raised my muzzle, scenting the air.
    Humans; their perfumes, their body secretions, still lingered on the air, like the first tinge of meat going bad. They'd left their scent everywhere. Not that I minded, I'm human too. Most of the time.
    It was late. The park I wandered in was empty. I padded onward, eager to finish the game, my paws silent through the short, manicured grass. The pavilion's floor was concrete and my claws tick-tackled as I crossed. My nose led the way to the cake, following the velvet-scented footprints to the garbage can at the far end. Tere it was, a big slice, icing-side down, tread marks squishing the corner flat, the whole of it coverd with ants. Yuck.
    I back away, running my long tongue around my muzzle, over my nose, fighting the creepy-crawly feeling tickling under my fur. A hard snort shook my whole head and finally blasted my senses clean.




    Submitted on 2009-06-24 15:07:36     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Yeah, it started off really nicely. It does need to be longer though.
    | Posted on 2009-07-02 00:00:00 | by Lincesa | [ Reply to This ]
      Well, it started off pretty good. Though you should've made it longer. The detail and everything else seemed just fine.
    | Posted on 2009-07-02 00:00:00 | by BlackRain | [ Reply to This ]



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