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    dots Submission Name: Londondots
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    Author: silverdrika
    ASL Info:    22/F/Brasil
    Elite Ratio:    6.08 - 127/118/42
    Words: 105
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 54
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 677



    Description:
       title in memory of just one more heartbreak

    I know visage is a noun, but i took the liberty of playing with it as a verb.


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    dotsLondondots
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    Tomorrow will be the day of the lowly
    The heart of the wickedly ruthless and cold
    Their eyes will visage to the loveless and faceless
    And their void will drain out the precariously bold.

    Tomorrow will be made to survive but to sunset
    To darkness, past toasts, dead with listless bland smiles
    When endorphins cloud over my body and synapse
    So your lethargic cold shrugs can uphold in their trials.

    Tomorrow will be your own day, my old darling,
    When Skittles and Coke will be ode to your fall
    To remember ethereal mishaps that reshaped us
    And forgive what pollution infected your soul.




    Submitted on 2009-06-24 21:28:59     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is a very deep poem. You pour alot of emotions in your words. There is an atmosphere blend that I see. The mood of this writing is very strong. I like this poetry.

    Chris
    | Posted on 2009-08-04 00:00:00 | by JoJoCrab | [ Reply to This ]
      Nice 4ft lines in comfortable rhythm. Unless your word S1 L3 "visage" means something that escapes me, it is wrong! Visage means 'the face'. My thought is that you mean here "look at or Gaze at." ??? Ted.
    | Posted on 2009-06-25 00:00:00 | by edcherry | [ Reply to This ]



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