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    dots Submission Name: chocolate milk, furty fivedots
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    Author: joezwells
    Elite Ratio:    3.81 - 64/78/54
    Words: 95
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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       response to captureyourself poem called "chocolate milk furty five" my best friends forever!!


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    dotschocolate milk, furty fivedots
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    chocolate milk furty five
    sober but still kickin it live
    vomit boy took a dive
    ate those chunks
    then we ditched those punks
    fought but made up an all that junk
    now we're friends and you are stuck
    walking around with our middle finger up
    if you dont like us..tough
    everyone loves us and cant get enough
    our lives are rough
    but fukc it we are buff
    we both changed big time
    but we will never forget are stupid ass ryhmes
    forever partners in crime
    badass for life, love you long time





    Submitted on 2009-06-24 22:53:13     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I read this a while ago and haven't had time to comment but [censored] yeah it is awesome. I miss you hella much and we need to talk more. Things are whatever here I dunno! Anyways I am a little worried about my bfffl always dealing with everyone elses problems never stopping for nothing, don't lose sight of yourself, getting involved in everyone else and forgetting the importance of yourself, don't stop fighting, don't stop realizing. I love you long time.
    | Posted on 2009-07-11 00:00:00 | by captureyourself | [ Reply to This ]


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