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    dots Submission Name: Spider Webdots

    Author: Sjcohen
    Elite Ratio:    1.62 - 0/0/1
    Words: 211
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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       I used to write a lot, and I am just getting back into it so any feedback would be much appreciated! I am doing a lot of soul searching and with that comes identifying some of the negative qualities one possesses. I know I am not perfect and even though I want to fix some of my negative qualities it is very hard. This poem related to that, enjoy!

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    dotsSpider Webdots

    Spider Web

    I do not feel broke, even though I see the crack
    Its minor, a spider web in a windshield
    I can still see through the glass however,
    I still function,
    I still protect from stones that shoot speedy into the spiderís beauty
    I work,

    But someday I will need to be fixed,
    The crack will grow,

    For now I wait,
    I trace the lines that make me
    Well me,
    Perfection is a fallacy in the argumentation of my wholeness
    A Red Herring in flight
    I work,

    But someday I will need to be fixed,
    The crack will grow,

    Remain in tact
    A puzzle piece cut with scissors to assume the position
    Everything is in disorder
    But it is held together
    By Elmer and his orange cap,
    Temporary as it may be
    I work,

    But someday I will need to be fixed,
    The crack will grow,

    Grow as it may,
    I will just find the widow and the recluse to join my army
    They will help delay me from the inevitable,
    Venom possesses power and that will help to protect me
    It will keep me as me
    I Like me,
    I work,

    And isnít that all that matters?

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