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    dots Submission Name: chance.dots
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    Author: PopRocksRae
    Elite Ratio:    2.61 - 218/287/297
    Words: 92
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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       when i have a child i would like to call him/her chance. cus it was chance that lead me to him.


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    dotschance.dots
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    leave it up to chance.
    are our souls intertwined?
    you always say im yours forever.
    im there in your twisted mind.

    my heart beats so fast.
    it is as cold as ice.
    im such a jerk.
    it kills me sometimes.

    i forgot to tell you you saw me.
    nobody eles saw me just as good.
    i don't think i can talk any louder.
    but for you i would.

    you're my own little sleeping pill.
    you became my dance.
    call us meeting fate.
    but i will call it chance.




    Submitted on 2009-06-25 10:42:54     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Again, Rachi, great work. I liked the feeling that no matter what the other person thought of why you two met and are now together, you will always say it is chance. And it is, it always is, always was, and always will be. Everyone needs to realize that they have to take a chance to try and do something in order to earn it. If you just sit there all your life, nothing will ever happen, fate will not find you. You have to take a chance and give it all you got in order to find fate for yourself. Thank you again, I love you work. Keep it up!!!

    ~Dreamer
    | Posted on 2009-06-30 00:00:00 | by Dreamer5009 | [ Reply to This ]
      Rae you can edit your work so you don't have to leave footnotes.
    | Posted on 2009-06-28 00:00:00 | by dismal_s child | [ Reply to This ]
      the line should read: "you became my dance.."
    sorry.
    rachel:)
    | Posted on 2009-06-25 00:00:00 | by PopRocksRae | [ Reply to This ]


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