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Selfish Time

Author: Cloacina
ASL Info:    25/F/KY
Elite Ratio:    5.24 - 20 /53 /54
Words: 69
Class/Type: Poetry /Death
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Selfish Time

Time without end,
boundless in your entirity,
why must you be
a limited resource to all things,
so sparingly?

What purpose are your portions
when we could dine forever
and never wear you thin?

Though you catch up to me,
though I watch dissapointed,
growing continuously
more tired and weak
as you pass me by,
you will be running still,
when I reach
the finish line.

Submitted on 2009-06-25 15:22:42     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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