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    dots Submission Name: Lets fall in love.dots

    Author: Theophilus
    Elite Ratio:    3.91 - 116/174/95
    Words: 214
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsLets fall in love.dots

    Lets go for a walk in a thunderstorm
    With the wind and the rain crashing around us
    No one will see the way we shyly look at each other
    No one will hear our voices quaver when we sing.
    My make-up will run and your hair will stick up
    And we値l be beautiful, we値l fall in love.

    Lets get married on a rainy day
    We値l take off our shoes
    And let our toes sink into the mud.
    You can put a wildflower in my hair
    And ill put a feather in yours.
    The air will smell like spring, breathe with me.

    Lets play in the mud like we池e little kids again.
    Well find the biggest puddle we can
    And we値l run to it, and jump and dive into it.
    Ill paint your face with clay while you
    Bury my legs in it, until our skin is the same color,
    Not black and white, we値l both be a light reddish brown.

    Lets go to the ocean while its raining.
    And step out onto the rocks, with the waves crashing around us,
    We値l hold each other close so we don稚 slip,
    And we値l just stand there, feeling our chests move
    Together in different harmonies to the same song.

    Submitted on 2009-06-25 22:10:58     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Really beautiful i have to say, like a fairytale beautifully painted before me. I like this piece alot because of its simplistic yet hard hitting form. Its so gentle on me and also makes me want to be part of it. I sometimes feel like escaping to a world like this. You have allowed me to do so in this piece, thank you.
    | Posted on 2009-09-03 00:00:00 | by Clayman | [ Reply to This ]
      soulful truth.
    this breathes with it
    so purely.
    | Posted on 2009-06-26 00:00:00 | by meoww | [ Reply to This ]

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