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    dots Submission Name: Lost Within Your Twisted... Thoughtsdots
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    Author: jackz
    ASL Info:    24/F/OH
    Elite Ratio:    3.76 - 591/622/378
    Words: 184
    Class/Type: Fanfic/Depressed
    Total Views: 447
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    dotsLost Within Your Twisted... Thoughtsdots
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    For the simply reason that you lied to me ...
    You had me follow your trail of deviance and hate
    And you knew...
    YOU BASTERED
    You knew I buy into your lies
    It only took a couple of years

    And soon there were only truths
    Lies no longer lay between us
    For I believed every word you spoke to me

    Soon this little 13yr old girl lost more in her lifetime than any one could image..
    Her...My dream of having that father no longer existed
    My innocents of being 13yr left me more and more every night he'd eat me out...

    I lost all respect for the only person who didn't betray me the way he and other male family members did..
    I lost all hope in having a mother who knew how to raise her children

    Because of your lies
    Because you knew I was young and native
    You told me things I wanted to hear
    And then you told me things you wanted me to believe...

    "This is the way I show my love Jacquelyn"





    Submitted on 2009-06-25 22:38:56     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This somehow makes me feel of a tormented teen hood.

    Is growing really hard for a girl? It sounds too difficult to me from these words that you have written.

    regards,
    AbsolutelyLost
    | Posted on 2009-07-05 00:00:00 | by AbsolutelyLost | [ Reply to This ]
      My heart really dropped just now, I really really am sorry. Too much emotion, hits a reader hard like trucks on the freeway. seriously I ... I feel like i did something wrong and i don't even know you that much. Here for you when you need it, we should get to talking
    kevin
    | Posted on 2009-06-25 00:00:00 | by every48seconds | [ Reply to This ]


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