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    dots Submission Name: Can You Not See...?dots

    Author: jackz
    ASL Info:    24/F/OH
    Elite Ratio:    3.76 - 591/622/380
    Words: 263
    Class/Type: Rant/Depressed
    Total Views: 636
    Average Vote:    4.0000
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       My Step father is an asshole

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    dotsCan You Not See...?dots

    Can't you see what you've done to me?
    Is it so difficult for you to understand I despise you for what you've done..

    I feel I will forever live within your presence
    Part of me is alright with this
    Yet the other half cannot accept it.

    See what you have done????

    You have me battling myself at wits ends..
    With what is right and with what is wrong.
    You have me going at war with myself.

    Is that what you had wanted?
    For me to go crazy like your daughter.
    For me to run away from you and not speak to you for years on end.

    Were you trying to push me away by touching me.
    Did you not want me simply as a step child…?

    Or were your intentions from the very beginning to use and betray me
    On the highest level possible?

    You deceived me you bastard
    You betrayed me
    You played me like you play a fucking board game!

    And the saddest part of it all I allowed it...
    Simply because I was yearning for that father figure in my life..
    Yet because of you
    Because of those choices you made.

    I cannot trust others,
    Not the way I allowed myself to trust you so quickly.
    So Thank You..

    Thank You, for possible ruining great relations I could have with others whom surround me
    Due to the fact that I can not quickly give my trust…
    Because of your betrayal

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      Have you sent this to him? You should, it might help! And his betrayal was the ultimate, but you allowed nothing. Would you tell a rape victim they allowed it, or another child who suffered through what you have? I don't think you would because you know that isn't true.

    You were a child give yourself a break.
    I love this I have written similar pieces to my father who didn't sexually abuse me there was and is emotional and mental abuse. Any abuse is hard and does damage even if it's just to the soul that seems to be the worst part of it. The part that is hardest to heal.
    | Posted on 2009-07-05 00:00:00 | by trynfinity | [ Reply to This ]
      What a sad and painful story. The love and trust of a father to a young girl is so important, and to have that trust violated must be a tragic and terrible thing. We are all diminished when an important trust is broken, and this would be the worst of all.

    It is good that you can write your thoughts out, as I think that is far better than holding it in and being silent about it. I think you have the affection and best wishes of all here at Elite.
    | Posted on 2009-06-26 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]

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