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    dots Submission Name: "She's Way Too Tall"dots
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    Author: Ron Cole
    Elite Ratio:    3.95 - 2383/1715/240
    Words: 105
    Class/Type: Poetry/Comedy
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    Average Vote:    4.0000
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    dots"She's Way Too Tall"dots
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    I met a gal
    down in the Valley
    shes known there
    as Long Tall Sally

    prettiest Gal that
    Ive ever seen
    but Boy shes tall and
    Boy shes lean

    we hold hands
    in the Shopping Mall
    Id like to kiss her but
    shes way too tall!!

    When we make love
    its not so funny
    my brow comes only
    to her tummy

    when were nose to nose
    my toes are in it
    and when were toes
    to toes
    my nose is in it

    theres just no getting
    round it all
    Id like to kiss her
    but shes way too tall!!!




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      Almost hurt myself laffin' ,yes there was another ' LONG TALL SALLY" back in the 50's era, but it didn't compare to your version. LOL
    I can just piicture this Mutt and Jeff couple doing a dance on the saw dust floor, she, banging her head on the overhead lights and he being kneed in the head by other dancers. Hoo Boy, what a picture you paint, keep it up Ron, try to work up a melody to go with this.
    | Posted on 2011-04-28 00:00:00 | by DUSTYTU | [ Reply to This ]
      It does need singing, like many of your poems!
    Do you know anybody who sings your songs, or do you sing them yourself?

    Anyway, for that you would need about six more stanzas and a two, three or four line refrain?
    | Posted on 2009-12-11 00:00:00 | by Glen Bowman | [ Reply to This ]
      Love this.
    The "limerick- like" vibe showcased your talent and wit.
    Yuh so funny.
    | Posted on 2009-09-09 00:00:00 | by rytrsbloc | [ Reply to This ]
      Love this.
    The "limerick- like" vibe showed of your talent.
    Yuh so funny!!!
    | Posted on 2009-09-09 00:00:00 | by rytrsbloc | [ Reply to This ]
      Ok, I have the eerie feeling I have heard this before. Was it turned into a country song after you posted it here? If it wasn't, then it should be. I could just hear this little ditty tearing up the airwaves, and see a funny video to go with it.

    soul-hugger

    | Posted on 2009-09-03 00:00:00 | by Soul-Hugger | [ Reply to This ]
      Hahahaha cute really cute (and a little dirty too) amde me smile on a gloomy day thank you Ron.

    Smiling as he clicks away,
    Jay.
    | Posted on 2009-07-01 00:00:00 | by Flowerinbloom | [ Reply to This ]
      Very comical Ron, and very well written. Hope it works out well for them both !!!!!!

    Frank.
    | Posted on 2009-06-29 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]
      This is very clever and funny. Thank you for making me smile.
    | Posted on 2009-06-28 00:00:00 | by ModestyB | [ Reply to This ]
      lol this is cute .... you made me smile :-D keep on posting!!

    Jackz
    | Posted on 2009-06-27 00:00:00 | by jackz | [ Reply to This ]
      Omigosh! What a quandary this couple is in!
    Poor Sally needs a taller fella and our fella needs a little lady!
    What a delightfully funny tale, Ron!
    Thanks for the laugh.
    | Posted on 2009-06-26 00:00:00 | by latentlylyrical | [ Reply to This ]


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