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    dots Submission Name: Walk with medots
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    Author: AbsolutelyLost
    ASL Info:    24/M/India
    Elite Ratio:    4.39 - 10/8/7
    Words: 136
    Class/Type: Poetry/Romance
    Total Views: 89
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 857



    Description:
       One on the life of a relationship


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    dotsWalk with medots
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    Take my hand and walk with me,
    I will take you to places you have never been,
    Over the river and beyond the horizon,
    Making you smile with leaves evergreen.

    It all starts when we hang till dawn,
    Breaking the ice of silence,
    Washing the shores of anxiety,
    Retrieving memoirs which we never knew.

    And then I look at the rising sun,
    Waking up again to see no one along,
    With a hope and a smile,
    To see you around.

    I walk down the line and find you along,
    With beer and wine,
    Smoking and sharing,
    We are rejuvenating over melancholic memories.

    Little by little the journey is coming to an end,
    I am still trying to open new horizons,
    To extend the warmth of our hands,
    I am desperate but chained.




    Submitted on 2009-06-27 04:08:24     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      The first two verses especially capture me.

    "I am still trying to open new horizons,
    To extend the warmth of our hands,
    I am desperate but chained."

    its sort of heart wrenching.

    you tell the tale well.
    | Posted on 2009-10-24 00:00:00 | by Theophilus | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow I like this post... you made it to where I was able to see a picture in my mind and the more I read the more this picture grew. Very nice

    Jackz
    | Posted on 2009-07-04 00:00:00 | by jackz | [ Reply to This ]


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