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    dots Submission Name: Invisible Demonsdots
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    Author: Wasted
    ASL Info:    20/F
    Elite Ratio:    2.15 - 7/22/18
    Words: 139
    Class/Type: Poetry/The pain inside
    Total Views: 334
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       6/27/09


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    dotsInvisible Demonsdots
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    They sit in stealth and attack when I'm weak
    It's not money or weapons, but power they seek
    They've broken me down, cursed the thought of a smile
    I won't do this again; I wish they'd leave for a while
    I cannot love others until I love myself
    But they prevent me from doing it, they've put me on a shelf
    I'm a novelty item, I'm a toy to be collected
    Not a one of a kind, but too easy to be rejected
    They seek to enslave me and murder my dreams
    I'm used and abused, I implode at the seams
    I want to become what you want me to be
    I'm so sick and twisted, it's you that I need
    I cry in frustration and fall to my knees
    How can I fight what I cannot see?




    Submitted on 2009-06-27 20:13:42     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Very good imagery. I like this a lot.
    | Posted on 2009-06-28 00:00:00 | by ModestyB | [ Reply to This ]


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