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    dots Submission Name: love me when im bluedots
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    Author: ladiesplanet1
    ASL Info:    23.cali baby
    Elite Ratio:    3.58 - 720/463/165
    Words: 205
    Class/Type: Poetry/BrokenHeart
    Total Views: 561
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    Description:
       another blame game another lame sorry day another miserable life story forgive me enjoy


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    dotslove me when im bluedots
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    im never sure how long i can do this
    with the world standing in my way
    i thought we could be different
    but it never works that way
    i just cant believe you did it
    when no one could before
    you ripped m fucking heart out
    and smashed it on the floor
    you just dont fucking get it
    youll never see my side
    im never gonna run
    unless i have to hide
    and you never seem to listen
    or is it you cant hear
    the only time i hide
    is when i run from fear
    and that guy tried to kill me
    but youll never understand i
    could have been the victor
    but he had the upper hand
    and you will never get
    that im not doing this to you
    but to the one who loves
    when i have no clue
    and it seems you only love me
    when im feeling blue
    and i cant take this pain
    cuz i know its not all me
    but who am i to blame
    when you are all i see




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