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    dots Submission Name: big stankdots
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    Author: ladiesplanet1
    ASL Info:    23.cali baby
    Elite Ratio:    3.58 - 720/463/165
    Words: 186
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
    Total Views: 542
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    Bytes: 1000



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       big stank belonged to me and dj and i left him in boston to go back to berkele so i can go to jail. i hate the government


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    lately all i can think about is how much i miss big stank and how i lost him...
    i ran away
    and i almost stayed
    but you made my mind stray
    back to those days
    that i now remember as haunting
    and as i hear you taunting
    i am laughing
    as i remember those little dicks
    that you hated on so cruelly
    and this is no duel to me
    this is not new to me
    and so i won
    i cant take your puns
    without being broken
    and im choken
    to the point of no words
    theres no return
    and it burns
    but i learn
    to hold back those yearnings
    of another beginning
    of another lost reality
    stolen from me
    along with my sanity
    and my humanity
    the things you demand of me
    are impossible
    but you make it possible
    and even though its plausible
    your cause is full of lies
    that you cannot disguise




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